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A year ago today I left you sitting on the street looking up at the sky with your black eyes, hands pooled in your lap. Your pianist's fingers still for once. I had small hands and I used to envy how your fingers bridged octaves so damn easily.
You said, 'It's going to rain.'
And I walked away.
.
The day before I left, I wrote you a song.
.
I don't think you understand. Jason. David. Whoever you want to be today.
How your hands snag on my hair and the way
you make me smile even when I'm about to fall apart…
Last winter I cradled my heart ─
.
I never finished. It was cold and quiet in my room. Outside the sun blazed down. The air conditioner buzzed. I drank the last of my Coke and dripped splotchy tears all over the sheets. I heard you were a player from a friend of a friend. She told me I'd better watch out.
A player. Yeah, I could believe that. You were always the best at whatever you did. Playing Mozart. Playing your audience to oblivion. Playing girl's hearts. I should have known you from the start.
.
I found the sheet music for the song you wrote me. Went downstairs and sat at the piano. Tapped out the notes tentatively, let them hang wavering in the air. Left your words unsung. But I read them all.
Every morning
I miss the sound of your breath…
I had no feel for the music. After two pages I couldn't do it anymore. My fingers were not yours; they couldn't stretch and dance over the keys like poetry in motion. The words were not mine – you had given them to me but the lies were always yours. You owned everything I ever wanted.
.
When I was young I dreamt about being a pianist. Not world class, just good enough for myself. So I could re-create Mozart's masterpieces in my own living room, submerged in reverberating cadences, breathing music like air.
I could say you knocked it all out of me, but it wouldn't be honest. I left it all for you. Music school, my scolding teacher, my scholarship. You had perfect hands and they cradled my face. Your breath on my chin. You are. Beautiful. I could get used to this, I told myself. Waited nervously for the catch.
I had a list: Leukaemia. A family tragedy. Losing you to your music. I had planned all these different ways for you to be dragged away by fate. I imagined us twenty years down the track, lovers parted by the ocean, dreaming of a return that never came. Stupid and sentimental. I know.
I know, but some things aren't in black and white. Hearts aren't like pianos. When you stop playing they still dance to your tune.
And I still dream of you.
.
What you didn't know was my history.
What you didn't know is that I had my heart broken twice by liars and I wasn't ready to go there again. I swore to myself you were different. I justified everything you did, every distracted smile, every time you told me you were busy.
And then I found the songs.
I popped by your place and you kissed me hello, then went outside to take a call. My piano teacher you mouthed. I sat down and looked glanced at the songs piled on your bed. For Hannah. My heart stopped. The one underneath read for Lucy.
There were five. One for every girl in your life. And a neat date at the top left hand corner. They were all within days of one another.
.
I tried to write you a song but I couldn't.
.
'I think it's going to rain,' you said.
'I used to love you.'
Your song wove itself around my brain and into the crevices of my collarbones. I'm probably saying this all wrong. But you said it five different times, five different ways. I guess we were all testing ground for your songs. Oh, girl. You're my heart.
'The air is damp like it always is.'
And I said, 'Goodbye.'
You said, 'It's going to rain.'
And I walked away.
.
The day before I left, I wrote you a song.
.
I don't think you understand. Jason. David. Whoever you want to be today.
How your hands snag on my hair and the way
you make me smile even when I'm about to fall apart…
Last winter I cradled my heart ─
.
I never finished. It was cold and quiet in my room. Outside the sun blazed down. The air conditioner buzzed. I drank the last of my Coke and dripped splotchy tears all over the sheets. I heard you were a player from a friend of a friend. She told me I'd better watch out.
A player. Yeah, I could believe that. You were always the best at whatever you did. Playing Mozart. Playing your audience to oblivion. Playing girl's hearts. I should have known you from the start.
.
I found the sheet music for the song you wrote me. Went downstairs and sat at the piano. Tapped out the notes tentatively, let them hang wavering in the air. Left your words unsung. But I read them all.
Every morning
I miss the sound of your breath…
I had no feel for the music. After two pages I couldn't do it anymore. My fingers were not yours; they couldn't stretch and dance over the keys like poetry in motion. The words were not mine – you had given them to me but the lies were always yours. You owned everything I ever wanted.
.
When I was young I dreamt about being a pianist. Not world class, just good enough for myself. So I could re-create Mozart's masterpieces in my own living room, submerged in reverberating cadences, breathing music like air.
I could say you knocked it all out of me, but it wouldn't be honest. I left it all for you. Music school, my scolding teacher, my scholarship. You had perfect hands and they cradled my face. Your breath on my chin. You are. Beautiful. I could get used to this, I told myself. Waited nervously for the catch.
I had a list: Leukaemia. A family tragedy. Losing you to your music. I had planned all these different ways for you to be dragged away by fate. I imagined us twenty years down the track, lovers parted by the ocean, dreaming of a return that never came. Stupid and sentimental. I know.
I know, but some things aren't in black and white. Hearts aren't like pianos. When you stop playing they still dance to your tune.
And I still dream of you.
.
What you didn't know was my history.
What you didn't know is that I had my heart broken twice by liars and I wasn't ready to go there again. I swore to myself you were different. I justified everything you did, every distracted smile, every time you told me you were busy.
And then I found the songs.
I popped by your place and you kissed me hello, then went outside to take a call. My piano teacher you mouthed. I sat down and looked glanced at the songs piled on your bed. For Hannah. My heart stopped. The one underneath read for Lucy.
There were five. One for every girl in your life. And a neat date at the top left hand corner. They were all within days of one another.
.
I tried to write you a song but I couldn't.
.
'I think it's going to rain,' you said.
'I used to love you.'
Your song wove itself around my brain and into the crevices of my collarbones. I'm probably saying this all wrong. But you said it five different times, five different ways. I guess we were all testing ground for your songs. Oh, girl. You're my heart.
'The air is damp like it always is.'
And I said, 'Goodbye.'
Literature
Confabulation
It's terrible what I did, and I know that. I should have just returned the book to her. Steal a girl's diary and watch the processes of her brain work in snapshots. You'll catch glimpses of her lifesee the most intimate relationship someone can have with their memory. I read her diary from beginning to endfrom the sunrise of her thoughts to that recurring dream she had last night, the one where she kept waking up only to find she was still dreaming.
She limits how much of herself she'll expose to someone. It's like her eyes specifically go to her
Literature
changing your dress or address
i sent you my love,
with a big fat fucking
ugly stamp on it.
RETURN TO SENDER
i guess my love wasn't enough.
maybe i should have bought you
a better ego or pair of sunglasses
you'd only wear once. new clothes
to match this month's persona. oh,
aren't you fashionable? my fashion
of intricate packaging love letters
with pretty ritzy glitzy glitter
and a cathartic bow on top.
laced with ribbon. purple.
no, no, no. TRY AGAIN.
maybe the mail glitched?
i re-sent you my love.
correction: i resent you, my love
Literature
Over and Under
Call me selfish for
wanting you all to
my
self,
but even at the top
of my lungs
my screams are
silenced by
your inability
to connect
on that level.
And even in the
silence
exchanged,
I'd still die
to hear you
tell me
anything.
I hate being
strung along,
and I've hated it
all along,
and for you to think
I'm oblivious
to your games
it's almost funny.
How does it feel
to be in control
and never reciprocate
even with my
strongest advances?
Well if it has to
be this way then
at least I'll know
I tried.
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Full title: Everyday wears me down until all I find is you
You're there even when I walk away.
_
This is based on #Xpose-it's prompt, Tell us what you hear. [link]
Written around this song [link] It's a great song, you should check it out
I love the sound of pianos in songs.
And Cyndi Lauper's 'Who let in the rain?'
Comments welcome.
You're there even when I walk away.
_
This is based on #Xpose-it's prompt, Tell us what you hear. [link]
Written around this song [link] It's a great song, you should check it out
I love the sound of pianos in songs.
And Cyndi Lauper's 'Who let in the rain?'
Comments welcome.
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Hmm. I think I love the way you used "it's going to rain" as a metaphor near the end"
I really really love how you let the imagery of music throughout the piece. And how the guy has all these songs. It is a very interesting concept.
I'm not a huge fan of the italics. Don't get me wrong, I love italics. But I think you used them fairly heavily in this piece.
I would actually really love to see more of the song pieces. They are quite interesting. I love the line "Jason. David. Whoever you want to be today..."
Overall, this piece hits very close to home for me. I've been here before (both sides, I think...) It's so hard to forget the past and focus on the present.